ext_8833 ([identity profile] menomegirl.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] summer_of_giles 2012-07-11 04:04 pm (UTC)

Ah, Giles Giles Giles. So close to perfect as a Watcher but for his glaring failure with Faith. Thank you for a glimpse into an inner monologue of his thoughts regarding his acknowledgement of that failure.

If you don't mind a small tiny critique? You have an error in the first paragraph that needs correcting; it made me frown and pulled me out of the narrative a bit: this sentence here-

All he can do is hope that the Watcher has promised to send out for her is one that can break through the walls that Faith has erected around herself.

I'm thinking you meant "the Watcher that the Council has promised to send out for her" instead?

:)


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